Selasa, 16 Juni 2009

My Favorite Person

My favorite actress is Chelsea Olivia. I so like her because I think, she is not only beautiful but also she can do acting very well. Her acting can make other people are interesting. In SCTV Award, Chelsea Olivia ever get award because she is a favorite actress in “ Melati untuk Marvel” cinema. She is not only become actress but also singer. She has singer group in BBB. Since that, she is more popular in entertainment.

Although Chelsea Olivia is still young, she has many activities such as shooting cinema, become advertisement star, promotion activity, and also she must manage schedule to school, but also Chelsea Olivia is not problem to do her activity every day. I think, she is a diligent woman to manage time. Before it, she feel difficult to do manage time but after she do her all activities, she can do it well. Chelsea almost can’t join in her class every day but she has method to full her lesson late, so she call her teacher to help her in her lessons. The activity can called home shooling. Actually Chelsea can do it with enjoy. She can get high score to all lessons but only one she can’t get score from it. That is English lesson. She can’t in English lesson because she can’t write and speak English well. She want to understand about English to Glenn Alinskie because Glenn Alinskie understand about English very much. I think it is good solution to Chelsea Olivia.

Chelsea Olivia confuse to choose university. She is request to glenn to give advise. Glenn’s advise is to choose best university to her. I so like with Chelsea’s activities and also She don’t forget with her education. I agree with Glenn’s advise to Chelsea Olivia because He choose best university to Chelsea.

13 komentar:

  1. I think your paragraph is good enough

    but you can edit some sentences:

    become actress
    with
    becomes actress

    feel with feels

    she do her all activities
    with
    she does her all activities

    call with calls

    called with call

    She want to
    with
    She wants to

    understand with understands

    confuse with confuses

    advise with advice

    BalasHapus
  2. your writing isn't focus,..

    you write too more point,.
    you can do the best again,.ok

    give me comment too,.

    elok 120810486G

    BalasHapus
  3. hi...

    i think your paragraph is focus on your favourite person,,and there are some mistake on your grammar, but that's ok,,you can practice more and more.....

    thanks,,
    karina 120810476G

    BalasHapus
  4. Hy....


    I think your paragraph is not focus....
    So you must do assignment more better again....ok guys...

    That's all...
    N GOOD LUCK!!!!

    By : Ria Anggraini.S
    120810492G

    BalasHapus
  5. hmm.. hi yulia,, thanks for give me a comment.
    I think your paragraph is good.. :)

    Pratiwi Ramandita 120810487G

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  6. haii yulia ..

    i think your paragraph is good enough ..

    but i found some mistake in your paragraph like "Chelsea Olivia ever get award because she is a favorite actress in “ Melati untuk Marvel” cinema" you should write "Chelsea Olivia ever got award because she is a favorite actress in “ Melati untuk Marvel” cinema.
    thats all ..

    120810489G

    BalasHapus
  7. i think your paragraph is good enough even you made some mistake on your writing....
    be careful on write a vocabulary,,,because it will be misunderstanding if you write on wrong vocab.....

    that's all my comment
    rudy 120810491G

    BalasHapus
  8. hi yulia..
    I think your paragraph is good enough. .
    Maybe you have to learn about grammar, ,because your grammar there are mistake. .

    BalasHapus
  9. hi ..
    thanks for your comment in my blog ..
    ilike your paragraph ..
    but i found some mistakes .. please you correct again ..
    keep in good writing ..

    Ranti Putri Nastiti 120810190G

    BalasHapus
  10. i think your paragraphs are good enough but you isn't focus with your topic.

    you choose chelsea olivia but you describe her so much.

    BalasHapus
  11. i agree with nadhira's. your paragraph just like Chelsea's dscription.

    about grammar, i found some-little mistakes ;)

    DAMASTI A
    120810185 G

    BalasHapus
  12. hay.....

    i think your writing isn't argumentation but it is description about someone
    and you should correct about your grammar

    kurnia suci (120810488G)

    BalasHapus
  13. Thanks for your comments in my blog before.

    I agree with your comments, and I will improve my writing.

    BalasHapus